When you are sitting at your keyboard letting your mind flow, do you often save what comes out as a just in case? Or do you make a habit of getting rid of anything that you feel might lead into areas you don't want to explore?
The room
is dimly lit. He is sitting at a
pc. Loud music surrounds him. He closes his eyes drawn in to the song. It is one of his favorites, one he hasn’t
heard in a long time. He starts looking
around, not sure of what he is looking for.
It strikes him almost from nowhere. A desire he hasn’t had in a long
time. He craves a cigarette. Something
he hasn’t had in a long time. His hand
almost shakes with the desire for one.
He continues typing into the keyboard fighting the urge. He doesn’t have any in the house
anyway. He forces himself to sit at the
keyboard to keep from getting in his car and going to the store.
He stops
long enough to look around the room. The
tv is shut off, no one is around. He has
been so lost in his own thoughts he didn’t notice when they left. How long ago was it? Where did she say she was going? He gets up from his desk and walks into the
bathroom. There is a note on the
mirror. We went to the mall be back
soon. Love you.
He looks
at the clock. She didn’t say how long
she would be gone. It’s almost dinner
time. He goes to the fridge and looks
inside. Finding the chicken breasts she
set out earlier to thaw, he plugs in the grill.
Soon the smell of grilled chicken fills the house. He steps into the pantry, finding a can of
corn and some potatoes. He puts the
potatoes in the oven and the corn on a pan on the stove.
Tires
crunch across the gravel of the driveway.
Soon the sound of three doors slamming shut breaks the soft ness of the
air. The front door opens. Two girls bound into the house. She comes in just after them, looking
slightly frazzled. "Kids for
sale," she says.
"Not
sure I want any," He smiles softly at her.
The girls run up to him hugging his legs.
"We
were shopping." The oldest looks up
at him big smile on her face.
"I
gathered that," he said. He looks
at his wife.” You must be brave."
"Not
sure what I was thinking." A heavy
sigh escapes her. "Wanna unload the
car."
"If
I gotta." He walks through the
front door. He returns shortly
thereafter with some bags in his hands.
Seeing his wife at the stove, “Oh dinner should be ready soon."
"Great." The girls come racing outta their room, the
youngest is crying screaming something about her sister and not sharing. "I don’t wanna hear about it. Talk to your father."
"They
been like this all day?"
"As
always," she said. "They have
been straining every nerve I have left and there aren’t that many."
This is very nicely written. I could see it all happen in my minds eye. I would encourage you to write more. :-)
ReplyDeleteSnippets of snippets, I tend to have different odds and ends floating around.
DeleteThat's really a good start Jon. If you continue working on your writing you will get there.
ReplyDeleteVery nice story. I put a smile on my face as I found myself in her shoes, and my hubby in your voice. Nicely done!
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Exchange the cigarette for stress and the girls with a boy and you have just described a number of days in my life. I enjoyed it thoroughly :)
ReplyDeleteMany times that is life with children.
DeleteWhew, missed this one since it got far down on my RSS feed and I'm not used to the new blog name yet! Ahyhoo, you might like the idea of writing in crots.
ReplyDeleteDefinition: http://nickerson.pbworks.com/f/The+Crot.pdf
Examples: http://grammar.about.com/od/c/g/crot.htm
I like those. They add a different dimension to thought.
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